Elaborate on each point more. One short reasoning sentence is not enough.

Be firm. Do not use ‘probably not” in your essays. Be confident and objective.

Excellent description. Comma usage is something that we can work on also.

You did a great job on organization! Your explanation is better than the last paper also! We need to correct the conclusion.

Excellent. We can use littering or pollution as your topic.

Add a comma to your compound sentence. Capitalize your place name. Tell how you feel about those surprises.

Add a sentence to each paragraph so that you have the point fully explained. You have a great start.

Have more than one sentence in a paragraph — paragraph 2. Be specific when talking about the ‘cool’ aspects of the plane in paragraph 3. “Chocolate’ is the right spelling.

An is used before eraser as it begins with a vowel. Good hook. The sentence about your friend is incomplete. You use it ‘on’ your hardest homework assignment.

Explain what the air smells like and the water tastes like. Put yourself in the shoes of someone who does not know. You have to be specific.

@Bill

Capitalize all proper names — Howling Wolves is a name. I cannot tell if you wrote ‘inportant’ or the correct spelling of ‘important’ for the word. ‘Poud’ should be ‘pound’ in the sentence. ‘Teammate’ is one word. Be specific that 1:1 is the score. Someone who is unfamiliar with the game would not know that it meant the score. The first…[Read more]

Remember that you need to capitalize proper names.

Add information that appeals to the rest of the five senses. You left out touch, taste, smell, and hear. Hearing and tasting may not apply here but always try to use all of the senses when writing a descriptive paragraph.

Excellent — Finish strong.