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You need to add another sentence explaining your examples in each body paragraph. You need to restate your opinion in the conclusion.

Remember to check for spelling and grammar. You misspelled ‘you’ in the last paragraph.

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Use a sentence to complete these boxes.

Remove the comma after New Orleans in the first paragraph. You don’t place a comma right before the verb unless it is in a series. Remove the example sentences at the end of the first paragraph and put a thesis statement there.

End with a note of finality or call to action.

Tell them. Tell them again. Tell them a final time.

Refer back to the introduction in a conclusion. Sum up the whole paper as a reminder.

You need to elaborate on your work. All essays will grow in complexity and depth. You have to explain everything to the reader.

Be careful about using ‘a adult’ when you write. You always use ‘an’ before a word with a vowel.

Bill revised his work in class. He will rewrite his final copy. He still needs to add more details that appeal to sight, taste, smell, hear, and touch. The reader should be able to visualize everything that is gping on and be as excited to go to the festival as Bill is. The

We need to work on a stronger conclusion and introduction.

Watch your spelling mistakes– safety, dollars,getting,earn. Use the correct form of to, too, or two. Avoid overusing ‘another one’ in your paper. Be clear.

No comma is needed after ‘time’ in the first sentence. They ‘were’ teenagers. Cute name for the shop. Write out the word minute. Do not abbreviate in formal papers. Try not to start sentences with the word but. “R” in race should be capitalized for proper names. Use the correct there, their, pr they’re in the piece. Look over this, see what…[Read more]

Avoid using the word ‘get’ as it is vague word.

Avoid using ‘you’ when writing an objective paper. Tell who it is you are referring to in the essay.

Don’t start a sentence with ‘because” in papers. Avoid vague words — ex. a lot, things, stuff.