Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group 4672-Writing G6 1 on 1 – Andrew 2 months, 2 weeks ago
This is a well-thought-out paragraph with a few minor changes I think you will have an edited draft. Try to avoid preparing words and phrases and simplify some sentences when you find you are using longer terms that might be rewarded more directly. Over all as always wonderful work. you have all the parts and have taken your time to introduce your…[Read more]
It was turned into an instead of we or the American government turned it…
is a powerful geyser simple reword for clarity
suggestions Simple call it Old Faithful as it is a title it doesn’t need the article the
Really well done I have offered a re rewording suggestions to avoid repeating ideas or words with the same tone however
They and the things around them are well appreciated- It is easy to appreciate these amazing natural wonders.
suggestions- consider rewording to something like -are examples of nature’s amazing creative power. Or examples of natural amazing creations. (Try to avoid repeating phrases.
Wonderful job with all your pages these look great if you have any questions please feel free to ask me.
Looks great wonderful work
This looks very good andrew
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group 4672-Writing G6 1 on 1 – Andrew 3 months, 2 weeks ago
These are correct great work!
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group 4672-Writing G6 1 on 1 – Andrew 4 months ago
Your paragraph captures the essence of what makes a perfect summer day, and you’ve included several key elements. Here are a few suggestions to enhance clarity and flow: 1. Clarity and Structure: • Each sentence could focus on a specific aspect of a perfect summer day. • For example, one sentence could discuss the importance of clear skies, ano…[Read more]
Rgus us well-written and very detailed. You have been able to add information that makes instructions clear. There are areas with longer wording or more than one comma consider making some sentences shorter. Keep in mind short and long variations offer a variety of sentence structures.
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