Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group R4566-Writing G4 -2students-Catherine,Chloe 5 months ago
Below I have a list of fun things you might do well attending the event. ..
yummy and what could be better then reading and eating at the same time.
You do have some great topics instead of repeating consider this example about family. You can bring your family along and spend time together sharing treats and reading. You may also read the same book and talk about the parts you like best. Another readon to bring family as you can help younger brothers and sisters read. You may even want to…[Read more]
You have great information here and some wonderful points. A few things to keep in mind. Try to avoid repeating ideas and phrases, instead consider alternatives. For example instead of saying In’t that… You might say It is so or that is amazing …
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group R4566-Writing G4 -2students-Catherine,Chloe 5 months, 1 week ago
I loved reading this great work. I feel like I learned a lout about you I also love to draw!
Heights This is perfect that you followed the format. Remember poems have a set of rules but also are great because they allow freedom of expression.
This is very sweet and repeating it a wonderful element to have in a poem it adds rhythm. Double check the last spelling of friend
This is fantastic! I like the crafting supplies as well
vicky commented on a Photo in the group R4566-Writing G4 -2students-Catherine,Chloe 5 months, 1 week ago
It is correct Cathrine!-Chloe
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group R4566-Writing G4 -2students-Catherine,Chloe 5 months, 2 weeks ago
() used to cite a source or pronunciation. Most of these can be it’s own sentence or added into he sentence
We play with Isabelle every day!
Be sure each thing is separated into its own paragraph. In addition, try to avoid repeating words or phrases and think of alternatives with the same meaning like grateful and thankful. Be sure each paragraph has a topic sentence and the sentences within support it. Overall great work.
Consider lengthening the examples – Create one paragraph on history one one things you are thankful or and one to ask the reader about or tell them reasons to celebrate
One fmaily gather
Place the second and 3rd parts together. Keep in mind a paragraph should be 5 sentences with one idea that is supported. So, for example, one paragraph for the history and one for family and so on.
But have you ever heard the story of…
Thanksgiving is the best time to…
Are there things you are thankful for? Instead of the do you have thanks for any thing consider alternative possible wording.
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group R4566-Writing G4 -2students-Catherine,Chloe 5 months, 3 weeks ago
Corrections 1. I am thankful for my mom… gives 2, The ideas in () can simply be turned into sentences as they are great ideas. 3. Catherine, Isabell, and I instead of me 4. You might consider adding a transition sentence like the following at the end of body paragraphs 1 and 2: Example paragraph 1. My family are not the only people I am…[Read more]
You have done a great job here. A few tips to try and avoid… in the essays. Also, try and avoid repeating phrases instead say the idea in different words to add variation.