Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group 4685-writing G5-1on1-40mins-15lessons 1 week, 6 days ago
Just be sure to add some sentences which are both short t and long. consider sentences which you might add more detail like you might explain one or two of the main positions instead of only listing. Adding a bit more detail will enhance the work.
This is a very good paragraph and explains the rules of soccer well.
Amanda J Teacher commented on a Photo in the group R4583-Writing G3 1 on 1(Allie)-15lessons-Amanda 1 month, 2 weeks ago
Correct the run-on’s.
Capitalize the title.
Amanda J Teacher commented on a Photo in the group R4385-Grammar G3 2 Students – Amanda 1 month, 3 weeks ago
The conclusion needs to restate one idea from your body paragraphs in a sentence — one sentence per body paragraph. Then you need to link the conclusion to your introduction. The body paragraphs should be about equal in length. What does ‘tired of time’ mean? Put a comma after wore. Avoid using ‘supposed’ in writing. How does it ‘let…[Read more]
Don’t give examples in the intro. Use background information, a short anecdote, a quote, or a rhetorical question to begin your intro. Your these needs to not have a list. It also needs to agree in tense. The first reason needs to not repeat words — usually is repeated. Avoid the use of informal words like ‘hang of it’ in formal essays.…[Read more]
Christina Teacher commented on a Photo in the group R4277-Phonics L2 – 1on1 -Tue/Fri CDT-30lessons -Saima 1 month, 3 weeks ago
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group 4685-writing G5-1on1-40mins-15lessons 1 month, 3 weeks ago
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Amanda J Teacher commented on a Photo in the group R4385-Grammar G3 2 Students – Amanda 1 month, 4 weeks ago
Performance is misspelled.
Vegetables
Avoid using get repeatedly.
Don’t repeat the same sentence in second paragraph. Change it to say something different that supports your topic.
Put a colon instead of a period after reasons — do not the next word after the period.
Abbi Teacher commented on a Photo in the group R4675-wonders G1-1on1 2 months ago
Hi! I’m sorry, I’m not sure what happened there. But you’re correct, it should be either “is going” or “went”. Sorry about that! Looking at it again I’m not sure why I crossed out the ‘is’. So it’s actually correct as it is written. Thanks for double-checking!
Heather Gil commented on a Photo in the group 4672-Writing G6 1 on 1 – Andrew 2 months ago
This is a well-thought-out paragraph with a few minor changes I think you will have an edited draft. Try to avoid preparing words and phrases and simplify some sentences when you find you are using longer terms that might be rewarded more directly. Over all as always wonderful work. you have all the parts and have taken your time to introduce your…[Read more]
It was turned into an instead of we or the American government turned it…
is a powerful geyser simple reword for clarity
suggestions Simple call it Old Faithful as it is a title it doesn’t need the article the
Really well done I have offered a re rewording suggestions to avoid repeating ideas or words with the same tone however
They and the things around them are well appreciated- It is easy to appreciate these amazing natural wonders.